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for Picnic Love

by SAT

schedule June 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Very nicely done. I must say, your description of the actual sexual act was astounding. Not only that, but you captured Jade's personality perfectly. That scene where she reminisced about being "Queen of the Park" was excellent and fit her perfectly. I haven't read a fanfiction written like yours in a while. I'm not even a fan of JCA fanfiction, but your story is most definitely one of my favorites. Bravo.
person Night
schedule November 8, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This was a good story to read an excellent plot to have read but still there are some grammar problems in the text. Also what you should do is add more details to the story like tell us how Hsi Wu came out from with in the demon world. Also you need some assistance in who are you talking about in your text i was confuse as you said Seymour and Hsi Wu so I didn’t know which form he had on. Other than these mistakes this was a pretty good story.
schedule October 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
very nicely done Tajeri^^ more please
person Kikue Chan
schedule August 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Cute .... and really good, I hope your other works are as... orgasmic
person fan
schedule February 16, 2004 at 12:00 AM
please write a sequel to this fine work of geneus
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schedule September 13, 2003 at 12:00 AM
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