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July 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oh. God. Really, I have no idea how to start this review, I just know you deserve one beyond any shadow of a doubt. First off, I realize that you haven't updated this in months, several from the looks of it, and you have no idea how devestated that is making me right now. Please, please, please...if you ever find it in you again...finish this story. I don't care how long it takes (well, really I do, but I don't even know if you'll ever read this review, let alone succumb to my pleas, so I'll just be open about this), I just need to read this through to the close. Eddy and Edd...uggghh...they just deserve a finish! And more than anything...I simply can't stand all this saddness.
I read the first chapter, and enjoyed it so much...I had to go onto iTunes to buy the song just so I could see how it went along with it. After reading your chapter titles, my stomach got all tightly knotted as I (for good reason) sensed painful, painful angst...but then, the story kept edging at the back of my mind all night (because, for some reason unbeknownst to even myself, I stumbled across the 'Ed, Edd, and Eddy' section somewhere around eleven o'clock about two nights ago). I just couldn't get it out of my head, no matter how hard I tried. Finally, this morning, I returned to it, begrudgingly giving in to my mental torment, and relenting by starting to read.
I never just 'start in' on stories seventeen chapters long. Hell, I don't even start on stories three chapters long all that often! I'm just a lazy reader. I love to write, but usually fail to read unless a story catches my interest right from the get-go. I have no idea what it was about yours that kept me...but I couldn't stop. Regardless of how many times my throat got all tight, how many times I hit my computer screen for making me miserable, and how many times I simply broke down in tears (which I also rarely, rarely do...), I read it from beginning to end. I couldn't help myself.
You have some absolutely gorgeous descriptions in here. Repeatedly, I found it amazing how well you picked songs to match each of your chapters, and sometimes, I found myself just all-out jealous of the skill you've displayed here. You took characters from a show I never really watched often or understood, and turned them into vivid, living-breathing entities in the back of my mind, tormenting me with their misery. For example, I found this description amazingly in character for Eddy:
"And Eddy? He’d been born with both his hands clenched into fists. ... One of his fists had been waiting for money. The other was just a fist."
And when Ed ended up drawing Double D like an angel instead of the monster he planned on showing? Touching, and sweet, and sad. So much of this story is like that. One of the most wonderful things though, is that you keep them all so thoroughly in-character, throughout the story. You never make Ed seem 'smart', but you do stay true to his large heart and good intentions that make him wonderful. You keep Edd's obsession with cleanliness and ohhhh how you made me hate both his and Eddy's parents in this story. Simply leaving them out there hanging like abandoned laundry, simply out there to be battered by the weather and never taken in. Ugh. That made me so mad...but you conveyed it all so well.
The emotions. Don't even get me started...they were so real. The way you kept things going and described the events as they happened... If overdone, angst can SO easily become dull and dreary. Just a bunch of mushy sap that doesn't make sense. But you didn't do that. You have angst and tears all over the place...but you made it believeable, and real, and...painful. It was painful for me to read, but impossible for me to push aside.
Then, we come to my most favorite scene ever. That very last chapter (which I pray to any god who'll listen that it won't permanently be the last), when Eddy FINALLY came to his senses enough to give Kevin as much of a bashing as he could. Eddy's fleeting thought, as he glanced up to Edd's window in the middle of the fight; I found it terribly evocative and fitting:
"...Eddy could swear Double D was behind those gauze curtains, was about to look out, to look down on him like some stupid mythical princess looking down on her handsome prince..."
And the fact that later Eddy found the thought rediculous, pointing out to himself that Edd was certainly no girl, and he himself was no 'freakin' prince'...that screamed Eddy to the max. Beautifully in character...and I swear I could picture it all.
-heaves a deep sigh- Well, alright. Now that I've filled up and scribbled out the longest review I've ever put into the making...I guess I can't say much more, even though there's at least one thing in every chapter that I could flaunt and drool over, I can't take up any more of your time (if you ever read this). Still, if you DO ever update...please, do something, anything...to just let me know? Email me, I guess, since you can't call me (ha). But really...I might even check back to see if you've updated, because as rare as it was for me to stumble here, I'm a total sucker for happy endings, and if you never let Eddy confess his love and ride of with Double D side-saddle into the sunset, then I'll just have to imagine it. So there. Until you come to your senses and finish this (happily, please God), I will imagine that Edd ran out right after the fight, dragged Eddy back into his house, mended his battle wounds, they finally got to talking, made up...and then they go off to college together. Double D becomes rich and famous for some brilliant invention...and they live happily ever after till the end of their days. Ya.
Beautiful story. Now finish it and make me happy! Pretty, pretty please? *muchlove*
-Moonstar
I read the first chapter, and enjoyed it so much...I had to go onto iTunes to buy the song just so I could see how it went along with it. After reading your chapter titles, my stomach got all tightly knotted as I (for good reason) sensed painful, painful angst...but then, the story kept edging at the back of my mind all night (because, for some reason unbeknownst to even myself, I stumbled across the 'Ed, Edd, and Eddy' section somewhere around eleven o'clock about two nights ago). I just couldn't get it out of my head, no matter how hard I tried. Finally, this morning, I returned to it, begrudgingly giving in to my mental torment, and relenting by starting to read.
I never just 'start in' on stories seventeen chapters long. Hell, I don't even start on stories three chapters long all that often! I'm just a lazy reader. I love to write, but usually fail to read unless a story catches my interest right from the get-go. I have no idea what it was about yours that kept me...but I couldn't stop. Regardless of how many times my throat got all tight, how many times I hit my computer screen for making me miserable, and how many times I simply broke down in tears (which I also rarely, rarely do...), I read it from beginning to end. I couldn't help myself.
You have some absolutely gorgeous descriptions in here. Repeatedly, I found it amazing how well you picked songs to match each of your chapters, and sometimes, I found myself just all-out jealous of the skill you've displayed here. You took characters from a show I never really watched often or understood, and turned them into vivid, living-breathing entities in the back of my mind, tormenting me with their misery. For example, I found this description amazingly in character for Eddy:
"And Eddy? He’d been born with both his hands clenched into fists. ... One of his fists had been waiting for money. The other was just a fist."
And when Ed ended up drawing Double D like an angel instead of the monster he planned on showing? Touching, and sweet, and sad. So much of this story is like that. One of the most wonderful things though, is that you keep them all so thoroughly in-character, throughout the story. You never make Ed seem 'smart', but you do stay true to his large heart and good intentions that make him wonderful. You keep Edd's obsession with cleanliness and ohhhh how you made me hate both his and Eddy's parents in this story. Simply leaving them out there hanging like abandoned laundry, simply out there to be battered by the weather and never taken in. Ugh. That made me so mad...but you conveyed it all so well.
The emotions. Don't even get me started...they were so real. The way you kept things going and described the events as they happened... If overdone, angst can SO easily become dull and dreary. Just a bunch of mushy sap that doesn't make sense. But you didn't do that. You have angst and tears all over the place...but you made it believeable, and real, and...painful. It was painful for me to read, but impossible for me to push aside.
Then, we come to my most favorite scene ever. That very last chapter (which I pray to any god who'll listen that it won't permanently be the last), when Eddy FINALLY came to his senses enough to give Kevin as much of a bashing as he could. Eddy's fleeting thought, as he glanced up to Edd's window in the middle of the fight; I found it terribly evocative and fitting:
"...Eddy could swear Double D was behind those gauze curtains, was about to look out, to look down on him like some stupid mythical princess looking down on her handsome prince..."
And the fact that later Eddy found the thought rediculous, pointing out to himself that Edd was certainly no girl, and he himself was no 'freakin' prince'...that screamed Eddy to the max. Beautifully in character...and I swear I could picture it all.
-heaves a deep sigh- Well, alright. Now that I've filled up and scribbled out the longest review I've ever put into the making...I guess I can't say much more, even though there's at least one thing in every chapter that I could flaunt and drool over, I can't take up any more of your time (if you ever read this). Still, if you DO ever update...please, do something, anything...to just let me know? Email me, I guess, since you can't call me (ha). But really...I might even check back to see if you've updated, because as rare as it was for me to stumble here, I'm a total sucker for happy endings, and if you never let Eddy confess his love and ride of with Double D side-saddle into the sunset, then I'll just have to imagine it. So there. Until you come to your senses and finish this (happily, please God), I will imagine that Edd ran out right after the fight, dragged Eddy back into his house, mended his battle wounds, they finally got to talking, made up...and then they go off to college together. Double D becomes rich and famous for some brilliant invention...and they live happily ever after till the end of their days. Ya.
Beautiful story. Now finish it and make me happy! Pretty, pretty please? *muchlove*
-Moonstar
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January 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Absolutely wonderful. I love the way you write and include songs that go well with the story! This is one of the best well written fics. I have EVER read, and believe me, I've read alot because I have no life. :D :3 Well, I hope that we'll get to see an update soon! I can't wait! n.n
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January 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I know I haven't reviewed i ages, but I love this fic and the newest chapter have been tearjerkers. GREAT JOB! Can't wait for the next update.
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November 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is the most wonderful, angsty rtale I've read in awhile! I'm so gald you updated this. Oh, and don't worry about not updating quick enough: I didn't update one of my stories for about a year ^.^;; Anyway, great work!
~Heidi
~Heidi
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November 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Aaaah! An update. I am so happy :-D
A twist. Enticing.
I know that reviews are for constructive criticism and whatnot, but I can't find anything to constructivley criticize. . . It's all very lovely.
A twist. Enticing.
I know that reviews are for constructive criticism and whatnot, but I can't find anything to constructivley criticize. . . It's all very lovely.
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October 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really, really love your story, but for heaven's sake UPDATE!!! Seven months is really too long! Have you lost interest in the story? Moved to a third world country where internet is a sad myth? Or have you simply forgotton?
And at such a cliff hanger too!
Please!
And at such a cliff hanger too!
Please!
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July 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh my God...
This is one of the BEST fics I have ever read! Seriously! And it's the only one to make me feel so connected to the characters. It's almost as if I can feel their pain. And the songs that you've chosen fit the chapters so well... I'm simply amazed. Are you going to update this, by the way? I would really love it if you did (as would others, I'm sure). I'm not going to harass you about it, though; it took me nearly a year to update a story of mine on FictionPress. This story's just so good that it would be a shame not to finish it. Well, good luck with this one (and your other fics- I love them, too ^.^), and I wish you well.
~Heidi
This is one of the BEST fics I have ever read! Seriously! And it's the only one to make me feel so connected to the characters. It's almost as if I can feel their pain. And the songs that you've chosen fit the chapters so well... I'm simply amazed. Are you going to update this, by the way? I would really love it if you did (as would others, I'm sure). I'm not going to harass you about it, though; it took me nearly a year to update a story of mine on FictionPress. This story's just so good that it would be a shame not to finish it. Well, good luck with this one (and your other fics- I love them, too ^.^), and I wish you well.
~Heidi
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June 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I just finished chapter 16 and I need more. Please finish, I am dying to know what happens.
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June 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Absolutly beatiful, you are very talented.
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May 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
One of the best pieces of written work I have read in ages, be it fanfiction or a published book. Chapter 15 nearly made me cry. I hope everything ends happily.