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November 23, 2012 at 12:00 AM
This was a very well put together set of chapters. All three were very well done. Plot very explained and presented in a manor. That the reader could easly pick up. Yet was highly interesting and very intreaging. Flow was good. All three chapters flowed very well. You did a wonderful job with the first three. I really liked how you have writen everyone. Hiss is complex and very interesting. Teela is also very nicely done. I really enjoyed my time spent reading this. I sincerly hope, that you do a couple more chapters for this. Its a great story and I would love to see it finished. Thank you for sharing it.
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October 19, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Awesome. Please continue, and have Teela become Hiss' Queen.
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July 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very good work and well reaghten. Don't stop now the story is getting very good more.
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February 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This story has potential...an update would be great. I'll ignore the Hsss parts if you don't mind...personal preference is with Adam/Teela...but that's me....Gotta Blast!
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November 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
This is getting quite interesting.
Can't wait to see what's going to happen next, keep up the great work!!!
Can't wait to see what's going to happen next, keep up the great work!!!
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November 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I am highly pleased with the way this story is going and can;t wait to see what direction it will take.
As your Princess, I command you to continue the story!!!!
As your Princess, I command you to continue the story!!!!
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July 28, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Great story, Ori!. I can't
wait for the next chapter.
Keep up the talented work!.
wait for the next chapter.
Keep up the talented work!.
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April 8, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Very well done. I have to say that you have handled the frist two chapters with class and style. Everyone was very believeable and I could see it all very clearly in my mind. You have something really good here and I hope that you keep going with this. I think it's worth your time and effot to do so.